Tell me what you think of my poem plz

how can you say there is more fish in the sea
while in the sea, i just see us three
since you love him, and no longer love me
how can you say there is more fish in the sea
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iamjustme
it really sucks!!!
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misunderstood
ty guys i think i will change it to

but since you love him and no longer love me

ty for you help
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iamjustme
You should change that third line to:

but since you love him, he no longer loves me

or something along those lines.
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olderthanifeel
The rhythm from the 3rd to the fourth line is kinda awkard and it doesn't fit... though the rhyming scheme is pretty interesting.
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